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Offline Jessy10

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Nothing But Darkness...
« on: June 20, 2014, 05:47:55 pm »
I made a poem that doesn't rhyme ;) :). Hope it's okay.  I didn't have nothing else to do!
Any who, I am not a big fan of poetry, so if it doesn't sound all that great, my apologies.  
Hope ya like it!



Darkness encloses around me
   Covering me like a cloak
           I feel trapped
I fight my way towards the light.
           Am I forever lost?
      Day in, day out... I fight.
I feel like I will never come out of this
         Will I every make it?


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Re: Nothing But Darkness...
« Reply #1 on: June 20, 2014, 05:51:58 pm »
I like the ominous atmosphere it gives the reader. Not all poetry consists of rhymes so that outtake is nothin' to be considered a flaw. A job well done, ma'am. I enjoyed what ye've provided.
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Re: Nothing But Darkness...
« Reply #2 on: June 20, 2014, 06:20:42 pm »
Very beautiful poem, you should consider posting more c:
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