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Playtime
« on: June 18, 2014, 05:50:23 pm »
Young.
Innocent.
Free.
Growing up was a pain...
But you had to.
So you put away your chalk
Crayons
Markers
And faced the real world.
Playtime was over.

Another freeverse!
This one actually made me sad though :(
« Last Edit: June 18, 2014, 06:37:19 pm by PotatoPotPie »
'Cause you're the last of a dying breed
Write our names in the wet concrete
I wonder if your therapist knows everything about me

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Re: Playtime
« Reply #1 on: June 18, 2014, 05:58:42 pm »
Although it is a very good poem, and I can really relate to this, try not to include cuss words as they are forbidden on this forum. ^^ I've removed the word for the time being, though you are free to replace that word with a more appropriate word.
Please, feel free to call me Genny. x)


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Re: Playtime
« Reply #2 on: June 18, 2014, 06:35:44 pm »
Although it is a very good poem, and I can really relate to this, try not to include cuss words as they are forbidden on this forum. ^^ I've removed the word for the time being, though you are free to replace that word with a more appropriate word.

Sorry <3 I kinda let the poem get to me, won't happen again!
'Cause you're the last of a dying breed
Write our names in the wet concrete
I wonder if your therapist knows everything about me

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Re: Playtime
« Reply #3 on: June 18, 2014, 06:49:11 pm »
It's okie, everyone makes mistakes c:
Love chur poem thu, I really like it!
« Last Edit: June 18, 2014, 06:52:00 pm by Sherlockian »
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Re: Playtime
« Reply #4 on: June 18, 2014, 07:11:01 pm »
I love this poem! You should make more ;)
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Re: Playtime
« Reply #5 on: June 18, 2014, 07:14:37 pm »
It's okie, everyone makes mistakes c:
Love chur poem thu, I really like it!

:) Thanks

I love this poem! You should make more ;)

Thanks! I plan to make a whole lot more! :)
'Cause you're the last of a dying breed
Write our names in the wet concrete
I wonder if your therapist knows everything about me