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« on: May 03, 2015, 06:21:23 am »
Hey guys! I know, its really been a long time. >.> I apologize. Anyway, over the past years I think its safe to say I've grown up quite a bit, I've experienced things, and so on. This poem is from 2 years ago, but I never got around to posting, so here you go.


It was only a matter of time,
Before I would feel the pain,
A pain that is so great,
It's one I cannot tame.

Why did I fall for it?
Why did I let you trick me?
It is the bottomless pit,
That will never let me be.

Now that the stress is great,
And my patience is running thin,
You will release all your hate,
Until even my sight is dim.

Time turns flames to embers,
Life changes like the weather,
And here I am,
Stuck in it all again.

Forgotten and betrayed,
Wounded and pained,
My fire's slowly going out,
And my mind is wandering about.

The hunted becomes the hunter,
I'm left here to wonder,
Is there a better world,
Where we can travel yonder,
Into the setting sun,
A life that is not a ponder.

I'm finally left to realize,
The world is dark and cold,
And the people's saddened eyes,
Are waiting to be told:

There is a Time when we will rise,
A Time when we can say,
We will not take it!
We will get away.

Away from the demons,
The sadness, and rage,
Away from three things,
That are our cage.

I'm still here in the dark,
Looking for my way.
I can't find it though,
And I am left to say:

"Run, run away, child!
Faster than you ever have!
Run farther and faster,
As fast as you can."

"Because,"
I say as I breathe my last breath.
"Time will destroy you,
And certainly bring death."


I would like to thank not only God, but Jesus, for I See Stars.

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Re: Time
« Reply #1 on: May 03, 2015, 11:03:30 am »
I love how you expressed every feeling in a great amount of detail. I wouldn't be able to write anything half as good as this aha, very well done. c:

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Re: Time
« Reply #2 on: May 03, 2015, 06:02:47 pm »
I love how you expressed every feeling in a great amount of detail. I wouldn't be able to write anything half as good as this aha, very well done. c:

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it. ^-^  I just took everything I was feeling when I had the idea for this, and incorporated it into the words. I'm overjoyed you saw the emotion in it! <3

I think you'd be able to do it. :D Poetry isn't necessarily something that you need skills for; its just emotions and actions being put into words. :)


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Re: Time
« Reply #3 on: May 23, 2016, 04:27:01 am »
I love this poem so much. I can empathize with this and hold it to my heart. The message is powerful, as well.


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Re: Time
« Reply #4 on: May 23, 2016, 04:40:03 am »
While this is a very lovely poem indeed, it would be best to not post on older threads such as this on. Just a heads up. ^^

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Re: Time
« Reply #5 on: May 24, 2016, 04:08:09 am »
I'm sorry, I thought it said 2016, yeesh. I'm sorry. :(


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Re: Time
« Reply #6 on: June 15, 2016, 12:29:06 am »
I love how you expressed every feeling in a great amount of detail. I wouldn't be able to write anything half as good as this aha, very well done. c:

Ah, thank you very much!! ^-^
It is rather old, I'd need to remake it soon. ;w;
I bet you could do something amazing; it all relies on emotion ;)


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Re: Time
« Reply #7 on: June 24, 2016, 03:46:17 pm »
Despite being a poem from 2 years ago, the emotion is still there as strong as ever. This is truly a masterpiece of the written format, well done!

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