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Title: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: catsanddogsandbirds on February 02, 2013, 12:12:33 am

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: whitesnow on February 02, 2013, 01:35:45 am

Nice! I really love it! Floof!

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: Wolfexpert79 on February 02, 2013, 02:10:53 am

Nice short story but you could use the punctuation marks ("") to seperate the dialouge from the sentence to make it easier for the reader to seperate the words from the actions :)

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: catsanddogsandbirds on February 02, 2013, 02:18:11 am

I used italics for that. The horses don't talk, they just have sounds that they make that simply communicate their point. That's why what they say aren't long or complicated sentences.

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: Wolfexpert79 on February 02, 2013, 02:25:27 am

Oh, that makes more sense then, I wasn't sure xD

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: catsanddogsandbirds on February 02, 2013, 02:28:02 am

lol yea

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: SoulRevenge on February 02, 2013, 03:04:13 pm

Wow, this ish awesome ;v;.

I've never liked horses that much, but the casuality they felt after another ignorant fool's death was perfect; no one really deeply grieved for him~ Which is, most likely how it would of worked in the real world; heros that were not heros but fools were not deeply missed ouo

-Nuzzles-

Title: Re: "The Average Day of Those Lands" ~Short Story~ *involves death*
Post by: catsanddogsandbirds on February 02, 2013, 03:43:19 pm

Thanks, Blacki *nuzzles*

 I'm glad you liked it :3