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FeralHeart Creations => FeralHeart Media => Stories => Topic started by: Glaciathewolf96 on November 25, 2016, 08:05:48 pm

Title: Toby (series)
Post by: Glaciathewolf96 on November 25, 2016, 08:05:48 pm: So i really wanted this series im making to be a comic, but im really more motivated to make the concept art and story rather then the comic so i think thats what i am gonna do! Please understand im not the best with grammer, but i did try to make it neat and understandable! When i finnish all the characters, they will be added at the bottom so you can see them!

Episode 1 Toby: A journey begins
http://glaciathewolf.deviantart.com/art/Toby-a-journey-begins-647786271

episode 2: Toby: Deer Oh Deer
http://glaciathewolf.deviantart.com/art/Toby-story-2-Deer-Oh-Deer-647990311

Episode 3 Toby: Friend from the past
http://glaciathewolf.deviantart.com/art/Toby-story-3-Friend-from-the-past-648687159

characters can be found here:
Title: Re: Toby (series)
Post by: Glaciathewolf96 on November 26, 2016, 04:01:41 am: updated
Title: Re: Toby (series)
Post by: Glaciathewolf96 on November 26, 2016, 09:02:25 pm: updated
Title: Re: Toby (series)
Post by: Glaciathewolf96 on December 01, 2016, 01:22:30 am: updated
Title: Re: Toby (series)
Post by: Melon on December 01, 2016, 02:32:49 am: This is a great story! However, I have one bad thing with the story. It is the lack of paragraphs. As all well, it is a beautiful story. 8/10 Not perfect, but still great.
Title: Re: Toby (series)
Post by: Glaciathewolf96 on December 01, 2016, 05:23:09 am: thanks! Do you mean that they are to short of stories, or are they just not separated? I am working on getting better with Grammar, i struggle with it alot.
Title: Re: Toby (series)
Post by: Melon on December 01, 2016, 05:58:15 am: The only problem I have with it is paragraphs, its a thing where you type a couple of sentences or more then make a GIANT SPACE lasting 3 lines then typing again. This is a piece of criticsm, but all other words.. It's great!