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Story Part 1
« on: April 27, 2018, 11:51:52 pm »
The wind buffeted his ears as he strained to hear his leader's orders. He dug in his claws, feeling like he was going to blow away.At the far side of the field, he saw the enemy pack creeping towards the pack. He growled, and quietly went into a bush, head low. He flattened his ears as thorns dug into them. He lifted his tail above the bush, and his leader got the idea. She muttered something, and signaled the pack to go the opposite direction.
Rustling behind him startled him, so he turned. Standing behind him were fifteen members of his pack. He nodded, and continued. Slowly, they crept behind their enemies try to creep behind his pack, but all they landed on was an ant pile. A wolf behind him snorted, and he slapped his tail over his mouth.  The other pack looked around in confusion when he saw his leader with the rest of the pack on the other side of the clearing.  She flicked her tail to them and he nodded. Growling, he came out of the bush in front of the other pack, signaling with his muzzle to the others not to follow him. "What are you doing here?" He snarled, ears back, tail curled. The wolf in front of him growled. "Take us to your leader. Now."
"Why?" He said, sitting down stubbornly. The wolf in front of him snarled in annoyance. "Bring us to your leader now, Avalanche!" Avalanche rolled his eyes and muttered. "Fine, Rain."


End of part one.
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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #1 on: April 27, 2018, 11:59:39 pm »
Hope you guys like it. <3 I'm really working on becoming a good author. See ya FH!

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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #2 on: April 28, 2018, 12:08:41 am »
I really really enjoyed reading this piece.

[A wolf behind him snorted, and he slapped his tail over his mouth.

That line, it made me really feel like I was there with them. It was very suspenseful as well, I'm curious as to what happens... Nice work here, keep it up. I hope to see more added soon! c:
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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #3 on: April 28, 2018, 03:08:17 am »
Good job, Sedgerow! This was a fun read, and I hope to further see some of the characters' interactions with each other as the story progresses. ^^

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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #4 on: April 28, 2018, 11:45:50 am »
Thank you all! Part two is coming soon!

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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #5 on: April 28, 2018, 11:47:05 am »
I kinda made it so the main wolf is alpha. X3 Ooops.

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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #6 on: May 06, 2018, 10:32:34 pm »
Very intriguing! I look forward to reading the rest of the story. +floof


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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #7 on: May 07, 2018, 07:27:44 pm »
Thank You! <D

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Re: Story Part 1
« Reply #8 on: May 09, 2018, 07:37:35 pm »
This is great! I can't +floof yet but it'll be coming toward you soon. >:0
Keep up the great work!


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