Name: Sekhmet
Gender: Female
Species: Lion
<If you don't mind, I think adding a bit more information could be helpful here. Like- how old is she, (judging from the bio you'd probably want to shoot for somewhere around 100,000 years or more. Based on your obvious usage of Egyptian culture, maybe tie into that time period?)>
Background: a blood thirsty lioness set loose by the god Ra to rid the land of all evil and cruel humans.
<Why are the humans in this history so cruel? Why is it required that they are destroyed? A bit more specification if that's alright with you.>
Soon becomes out of hand
Why is this? Was she set off by a trigger? Did she succeed in decimating the evil, and had to satiate her want of blood?>
and is brought back to Ra who wants to change her into godess of life.
<again, if you could just tell us why this happened, please?>
Sekhmet doesn't want this,<Why, though?> but Ra does his magic has she is running so he only strips her of her blood thirstiness, but she gets out with most of her original powers, but she has new powers now. < why does she have new powers now?>
Power: able to heal anyone, bring people back from the brink of death, and of course start fights. Can not die, is immortal
< Okay, I reeeeaaaalllly hate to gripe about powers- because I don't like telling people what to do with their characters, or I don't think highly of something about that character- but she just seems to maybe have too many powers? I'm not sure, because this is just my personal opinion- but I just maybe think she might be overpowered. (sorry.) Maybe you're just not being specific enough for me- because I can't really see the boundaries of these powers- so maybe all it needs is to be specified.>
Favorite thing to do: Guard who ever will take her in to their pride, and fight who every threatens he pride.
Looking for: A mate and Pride to protect
Found mostly at: Bonfire Island and Feral Lands
< If you don't mind, I think maybe adding a personality section might be helpful. Thanks. Also, since you don't have a picture- maybe just a physical description?>
Name: Sekhmet
Gender: Female
Species: Lion
<If you don't mind, I think adding a bit more information could be helpful here. Like- how old is she, (judging from the bio you'd probably want to shoot for somewhere around 100,000 years or more. Based on your obvious usage of Egyptian culture, maybe tie into that time period?)>
Background: a blood thirsty lioness set loose by the god Ra to rid the land of all evil and cruel humans.
<Why are the humans in this history so cruel? Why is it required that they are destroyed? A bit more specification if that's alright with you.>
Soon becomes out of hand
Why is this? Was she set off by a trigger? Did she succeed in decimating the evil, and had to satiate her want of blood?>
and is brought back to Ra who wants to change her into godess of life.
<again, if you could just tell us why this happened, please?>
Sekhmet doesn't want this,<Why, though?> but Ra does his magic has she is running so he only strips her of her blood thirstiness, but she gets out with most of her original powers, but she has new powers now. < why does she have new powers now?>
Power: able to heal anyone, bring people back from the brink of death, and of course start fights. Can not die, is immortal
< Okay, I reeeeaaaalllly hate to gripe about powers- because I don't like telling people what to do with their characters, or I don't think highly of something about that character- but she just seems to maybe have too many powers? I'm not sure, because this is just my personal opinion- but I just maybe think she might be overpowered. (sorry.) Maybe you're just not being specific enough for me- because I can't really see the boundaries of these powers- so maybe all it needs is to be specified.>
Favorite thing to do: Guard who ever will take her in to their pride, and fight who every threatens he pride.
Looking for: A mate and Pride to protect
Found mostly at: Bonfire Island and Feral Lands
< If you don't mind, I think maybe adding a personality section might be helpful. Thanks. Also, since you don't have a picture- maybe just a physical description?>
I like the Egyptian culture inspiration in this character, and what's written about her is pretty good so far.
I'm sorry that I think she might have ?too many powers, but again, that's only my own opinion, take it as seriously as you would like. I'm sorry if I've offended you by being so rude or too critical of your character- and a lot of it seems just fine and dandy! But if you could maybe be a bit more specific and just elabourate more on her.
I would gladly do so if people want to take 5-10 minutes to read my characters bio. So up to the people if they want more info. Message me if you want more detail on Sekhmet though.
QuoteI would gladly do so if people want to take 5-10 minutes to read my characters bio. So up to the people if they want more info. Message me if you want more detail on Sekhmet though.Kayla, most of us that look at the different characters and their bios actually don't mind spending a while Reading bios, other wise we would simply not look on here. I do like the basis behind your character, but as Ghost said, more info on why things happen to her would be nice