FeralHeart Creations => Stories => FeralHeart Media => Poems => Topic started by: Golddaddy on December 04, 2013, 04:41:53 am
Title: HeartAche. (By Jordan Goldade dedicated to XxspiritmoonXx)
Post by: Golddaddy on December 04, 2013, 04:41:53 am
So many things happened between me and my girlfriend. I abandoned my old account starting fresh with this one. I wrote this for Her and I. Any comments or criticism feel free to share. thanks )))
HeartAche.
O, A heart so cruelly bashed and tore. What hath it been done which deserve of it? I see a flower swaying gently alone and I hear the mournful cry of something lost along the way, crying for the past as it once was, only an imagination of something that can not be reached. A gift of vast knowledge and intelligence, but the greatest gift is the love for someone. It bleeds out slowly dying while holding onto compassion, love, and the least bit of hope. Washed away slowly with tears, sorrow and grief. O Lord have mercy upon my soul.
((Love you spiritmoon,))
Title: Re: HeartAche. (By Jordan Goldade dedicated to XxspiritmoonXx)
Post by: LightWolfWarrior on December 15, 2013, 05:50:33 pm
I love this. It's very emotional and moving and altogether well made. I hope you will continue to write poems, they're amazing.
Title: Re: HeartAche. (By Jordan Goldade dedicated to XxspiritmoonXx)
Post by: ~Stargazer~ on December 16, 2013, 03:36:05 am
Lovely poem c: You really captured the emotions :3
Title: Re: HeartAche. (By Jordan Goldade dedicated to XxspiritmoonXx)
Post by: Golddaddy on December 20, 2013, 10:30:10 pm
Thank you guys vey much for your kind comments :3 I will continue writing poems. (just a beginner)
Title: Re: HeartAche. (By Jordan Goldade dedicated to XxspiritmoonXx)
Post by: Vespian on December 20, 2013, 11:16:13 pm
Such disparity and martyrdom you've weaved within each word and structure of your poem. Quite emotional. A job well done and I'm sorry to hear about the misfortunes between ye' and your girlfriend.