YES GURL.
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Pfft, just go with it. :D Don't doubt yourself.
I really like where this is going. You can really tell the feelings that this girl has for him. Plus, the imagery in this very alive and well thought out. Even though i don't enjoy paranormal stuff or anything with...demons, I really love the chemistry of romance in this. Me - I am girl who loves romance and would do every single rp based on romance. You friend has this talent and I encourage you to continue. :p Don't let anyone stop because romance is trickiest things to do.
The writer, or writers in general, needs to explain what he or she is feeling for this particular person. Spice it. Flavor it. And just put everything together. Writing is meant to capture the reader and their attention, and you seem to capture mine. I also do enjoy mature scene ;) That should make your story more interesting.
I like it. Hope to see chapter 1 release soon.