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(: PLEASE READ...Black Mist's story~ :)
« on: April 24, 2011, 08:33:15 pm »
Black Mist's Story. Im 13 Btw So It might not be Epic :) Her goes...

The looming darkness weaved in and out of the trees,A near by Gushing waterfall thundered,To the steady flowing river beneath it. Yet,Something made the forest animals shiver and seem alert,Not the Wind,The Booming rain,nor the Gloomy Darkness,There was something else out there...Something they could'nt put there paw on...

A Shadowed Figure padded in the watching forest,Trees seemed to turn and watch,The rain whipped and belted the ground with such power,It made marks in the shrivelled ground. Thunder Seemed to rule the skies with its electric might. Leaves whirled in the fogged air,And the Lumbering shadow lifted its head,Ears seemed to be pricked listening for any signs of life its ears twitching. A low Growl broke the eerie silence,The creature curled its lips to reveal a snarl,The rumble of its growl seemed to be more intense than the thunder, the sign of anger greeted the forest... ,The animal searched its eyes through the scattered trees,Leaves smacked its face hard as the wind surged on. A near by river twisted through its path,And another low rumble came from The clouds sending a flash of light that filled the woodland for a second,Followed by more rain that punched the ground. The animal reached towards the end of the woods,Its padded walk forming into a darting charge,Followed by a halt,as it looked towards the sky,Struggling to see as heaving rain lashed into its eyes,Then thats when you knew its gender,It was a She,Her eyes a Delicate slit,and her peircing ice blue eyes glowed brightly in the horendus weather... TO BE CONTINUED!!!! Sorry there was no talking just trying to get the hang of things :) COMMENT IF YOU WANT MORE OF THE STORY!!!

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Re: (: PLEASE READ...Black Mist's story~ :)
« Reply #1 on: May 02, 2011, 10:28:02 am »
Being 13 doesn't change how you write, if you know how to do so. And I must say that was beautifully written.
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