That.was.awesome. xD that was so good. You should consider making more. But sorry to critique i do agree that you should try to set a "creepier" setting over time. But overall it was REALLY SPANKIN GOOD! Wow! That was really good. It gave me a creepy feeling, but not terror. (Which is good, btw)
I want you to write another horror story like this one, this time though, try and set a creepier atmosphere by developing it over time.
Thanks! And don't worry about the critique, I was searching for one! I'm planning out a very long version that will be typed today, and hopefully will be creepier.
Ohmygosh make more! This was amazing!
Luckily it wasn't scary enough to give me nightmares like the Russian Sleep Experiment
I will be making more, thanks a lot! And don't get too comfy....more is on the way. x'3