Ahh, you're improving! Great job! I can definitely see that you're trying to explain some more things, putting detail behind your actions. I could actually get a slight picture and image of what Greetus was doing~ The next step that I would suggest is what Wolvie has mention and explained. It helps set up the area and land so that you and the other player can get a general idea of where they are, and how their characters will act and react to an attack, and or attacking. I can type out an example if you'd like to have something to go off of =) Keep goin', you're doing great! x)
