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Outside the pack.(chapter 1)
« on: July 27, 2011, 07:46:44 pm »
                                                                (Chapter 1)
"Hey...Akira.....where are we"Soul asked from inside a metal box.Akira gets up and hit his head against the Boxes top"I dont know"he said rubbing his head"Atleast we got water....they should have put it in a bowl"he said glaring at the water."I dont think you should drink it..."But she spoke to late and he ended drinking it and spitting it out"GOD WHAT IS THAT!!!"he yelled."I tried to warn you.Our real problem is how do we get out and when we do how do we get back home"she exclamied.
Thats chapter one.Chapter two is on its way soon.
-SoulSurfer
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Re: Outside the pack.(chapter 1)
« Reply #1 on: July 28, 2011, 06:49:45 pm »
Nicely done SoulSurfer. <3
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Re: Outside the pack.(chapter 1)
« Reply #2 on: July 28, 2011, 06:50:55 pm »
Okay, not bad, but that's too short to be one chapter. like i said, not bad. keep at it, and i hope you do make more, because it does look interesting. :)
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Re: Outside the pack.(chapter 1)
« Reply #3 on: July 28, 2011, 06:55:56 pm »
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« Last Edit: July 28, 2011, 06:58:17 pm by Tao »
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Re: Outside the pack.(chapter 1)
« Reply #4 on: August 06, 2011, 03:49:01 pm »
Quote from: Tao on July 28, 2011, 06:50:55 pm
Okay, not bad, but that's too short to be one chapter. like i said, not bad. keep at it, and i hope you do make more, because it does look interesting. :)
Sorry if too short.I was using my cousins computer but it has slow internet so If i typed alot it would take long to load and it probably might not go in so yeah im posting chapter two today cuz im at my grandmas house.-SoulSurfer   P.S the character Soul is really me and Akira is a friend of mine.
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Re: Outside the pack.(chapter 1)
« Reply #5 on: August 06, 2011, 05:15:17 pm »
Quote from: Zaroque on July 28, 2011, 06:49:45 pm
Nicely done SoulSurfer. <3
Oh,just wanted to tell you I posted chapter two of outside the pack!and thanks.
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