Very good! I really love your sense of literacy! I too, am learning every day of RP skills. Hey, maybe I can show ya what I got, hm? :3 Also, you guys can have your opinions on the post too! My character is Caylis, a Hallow of mine, she has a LONG story, sooo. Enjoy!
Sapphire eyes gleamed as a black shape, a feline, a Hallow stepped through the snowy woods, with a snort she shook off the snow off her fur. A growl emitted from her maw as Caylis started to form a sadistic smirk, it was a habit she had taken ever since she killed her first target. Red hair hid her face as she chuckled. "Come out, come out.. wherever you are..." she said sickly as new blood dripped from her teeth...
Caylis has been driven into bloodlust.
I hope ya like it!