Hmm... T'seems to be a good plot behind this, but yeah, it could use a bit more suspense. ;w;"
Agreed, it could use a bit more scare in it, but good job. Maybe if she had been sucked into the game and chased? Something? IDK, but good one. Also, me being my bit-of-a-Grammar-Nazi self, *where *screen. Sorry :3
Sky: Hi.
Wow, you're not being insane! Congrats. *Gives a muffin*
Sky: Yay. :3
PewDiePie: Hey, that was my muffin! *Slaps Sky with a squid*
Sky: Ow, hey! *slaps Pewds with a barrel*
PewDiePie: You did not just go there!
This is getting out of hand. Well, good story!
-Stargate