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Characters / Re: My new Dragon character
« on: September 21, 2012, 03:27:58 pm »
What if you are already an oreo cake?..Nvm I'm a cannible anyway 
great character, I like it.
great character, I like it.
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Stories / Re: Forever Fire (Prologue)
« on: May 21, 2012, 04:13:21 am »
Her earlier pray went unanswered.
Her earlier prayer went unanswered.
I would add more if I were you..
For Example:A dark form sprinted across the rough terrain, her black and brown hair flowing behind her as she ran. Tightly griped within the palm of her hand was (Describe the Forever fire I bit more)
(Or something like that, I know it's not the best example but it should give you an idea of how to make your prologue better)...Hm
Her earlier prayer went unanswered.
I would add more if I were you..
For Example:A dark form sprinted across the rough terrain, her black and brown hair flowing behind her as she ran. Tightly griped within the palm of her hand was (Describe the Forever fire I bit more)
(Or something like that, I know it's not the best example but it should give you an idea of how to make your prologue better)...Hm
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Stories / Re: ?????????
« on: May 21, 2012, 03:49:39 am »
Arren replied. "And may what your name is?" The pup stared blankly at Arren and nodded.
Possible correction: "And may I ask what your name is"
(That was the only part I found confusing, other then that..it was Epic)
Possible correction: "And may I ask what your name is"
(That was the only part I found confusing, other then that..it was Epic)
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Characters / Re: MAIN WOLF CHARACTER ? Shiba ?
« on: May 21, 2012, 02:30:32 am »
....Not very flashy, but whatever it's still nice
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Member Bio & Journals /
« on: May 21, 2012, 02:25:05 am »
Oh my, you sure have a lot to say about yourself don't you? Well no matter it's better then most. Those who only have a couple of sentences about themselves should learn from a Gal like you....
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Characters / Re: Rairukka's Minions
« on: May 20, 2012, 11:05:49 pm »
...I Agree the presets are indeed impressive.