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« on: January 02, 2015, 02:59:10 am »
I don't like to criticize another's characters, since each character and its appearance have special significance to their owner, but if you want, I could give some hopefully helpful comments on the backstory. Please don't take anything I say as just pointless judging or me being a snob. I'm just giving my personal opinion, and you can choose to take it or not. (Sorry for this long disclaimer. I have a history of accidentally offending people with my critiquing xD)
The plot of your character's backstory is good, but it might help if you add more detail, perhaps focusing on your character's emotions when all those things happened to her. That way, it may seem more like a story than simply a record of events. When packs rejected her, was Ilumina hurt? Confused? Angry? The choice is yours on whether this is the approach you want to take. I hope this helps! (And doesn't make you want to punch me in the face!)