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Which unfinished stories shall live? (Please read the post before voting)
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SoaringAway
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Re: Which unfinished stories shall live? (Please read the post before voting)
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April 07, 2013, 02:24:25 am »
*Peeping in.* Hello, dears! Just came in to elaborate on what BouncyLion101 picked up.
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"The cat scoffs at this."
The structure is already fine as you've identified the subject (cat) and the verb but when you go to "this," this already is confusing. What IS she scoffing at? Because they're a different breed of wild cats? Because of what they're doing? Because she can't have that life style? There is nothing wrong grammatically but rather with syntax. If keeping up with this form of writing, it'll end up confusing readers (not all) and they might come up with their own skeptic thoughts.
(P.S.: I will be editing this though :3 )
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catsanddogsandbirds
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April 07, 2013, 01:49:44 pm »
Well, the cat's scoffing at the fact that the other cats are fat and happy. I'll try to make that more clear, though, like I said, it's only the description >.< But thanks, Soar.
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YouheiSunohara24
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April 13, 2013, 08:20:57 pm »
I like The Spotted Ones. :3 It's epical... I ish a cat lover, soooo... XDDD
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For me, crazy is a loose term. Crazy is when you drive by in a car with a shotgun shooting a cops. Cuz... then you're gonna get in big trouble. Crazy is when you start screaming at the word "Shinigami". Crazy is when you support Kira. You're crazy if you touched my chocolate because that means you want to die. If you're crazy, put this in ur sig.XD
catsanddogsandbirds
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April 14, 2013, 06:20:04 pm »
Thanks for commenting, Mello!
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YouheiSunohara24
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For me, crazy is a loose term. Crazy is when you drive by in a car with a shotgun shooting a cops. Cuz... then you're gonna get in big trouble. Crazy is when you start screaming at the word "Shinigami". Crazy is when you support Kira. You're crazy if you touched my chocolate because that means you want to die. If you're crazy, put this in ur sig.XD
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