Please give me a picture... of just, one of your characters. XD
Also, just a suggestion, try to put a comma before your character speaks.
Example, Few would attempt to leap at a wolf. Her hooves sharp and head ready to bash, "Try attacking now, you wolf!" she cried, preparing to hit it.
If you use commas more, you can make your sentences longer, with not as many abrupt stops.
xD Just a suggestion.~ <3