Feral Heart

wait what did i get accepted yet i cant realy find other comments cause the FH page is acting up

and serously guys..... i REALY wanted to join you..... my mom saw my crying a bit and then she limited my time on here WTF?!?

@ Epik Wolfy ~ Well, if it was a simple misunderstanding, it is possible Kerri might reconsider. But I don't know for sure.

Oh, and concerning the quoting. Everything between the [quote*][/quote*] that has nothing to do with you specifically. You should probably remove so your posts aren't always excessively long. Plus, you should be writing outside the quote, otherwise it can get a tad confusing when reading it. ^^;

I went and grabbed your app, just in case you wanted to fiddle around with it, without digging through the clutter. Instead of quoting my post, you could always copy and paste your app.

Quote from: epik wolfy on January 22, 2012, 12:42:18 am

Name: Tsubaki                                                                     yum...... Salami
Gender: Female
Age: 10
Parents: X
Mate: X
Offspring: X
Personality: Shes very quiet most times. She is also very loyal to her leader elders and masters. She cares for her tribe members. shes also verry affectionate. Also strong
Ingame Username / Forum Username: peanuts07   Epik Wolfy
Desired Rank: warrior
RP Sample (We are a literate RP group! At least four complete sentences!):
 She looked at her reflection in the clear water. Voices filled her mind and thoughts. Why...... Why is this happening? She looked up to the clouds. She saw a cheatah shaped cloud. What is this......? She strode back to her den. Her head was pounding...... Why wont it stop? A coyote was wandering around her den..... Tsubaki spotted the coyote and ran. Right behind her, the coyote tryed to pounce. WHAT? This was only a dream. For now......

From the looks of what I think is your current version, it's true that it's more than four sentences. But it could probably use a little more work? Commas are your best friend when writing. Plus, only try using three periods instead of a bunch. And, whenever a character speaks, people like to make use of quotation marks. Otherwise known as these things; "". And sometimes the asterisks ** whenever a character thinks.
I'm going to stop myself right here before I start typing a wall of text on ways to try improving your roleplaying. >>;
These are just a few tips, you're free to either consider or ignore my advice.

                                                                                                                                                             Well..... i dont REALY know how to RP i only did it once and they said i needed improvments i all i need is practice and thats why i came to you guys too

Quote from: FrostWynd on January 23, 2012, 01:14:48 am

Heirs are supposed to be related to the leaders by blood. Since Rei has no mate, having cubs is technically impossible right now.

@Okami ~ Like I said to Tangle earlier. So for sure it's a no to the Heir rank.
You don't have to be a Trainee, you could pick any of the other ranks. Just depends on what you want to start out with.

@ Epik Wolfy ~ With your earlier triple posting. Sorry but you weren't. As it did look like you were being impatient when you posted the same quote three times in a row...
If your computer really is laggy, don't click the post button more than once. If you're not sure about whether or not it went through, open up a new tab and load a different page to see if it's there. That way you can avoid double/triple/quadruple posting.
 
im sorry about tripple posting my computer is realy crappy..... i realy want to be accepted and im sorry for being impatent im just like that the triple posting is an accedent

wait... was i approved into the tribe? heh heh..... sorry i just cant find my comment and my comp. is just so laggy sometimes